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Hello (:
When i read this poem, i felt my heart squeeze with each sentence and metaphor, since you put this together so cleverly and with very vivid visualizations. I like how you concentrated on the sensation of "touch" and emotions mostly, because it almost makes the entire piece feel like a metaphor to the actual relationship between two people(which seemed to be what you were going for).
Even you you said you wrote this phrase by phrase, it blends nicely, and flows. The way you spaced it also reminds me of emotions, and how they just pour out all at once, especially emotions linked with love.
My only advice really would be perhaps trying a similar concept, and elaborating within each sense(taste, touch, smell, hearing, and sight), and this could make this an even richer experience to readers.
Beautiful work!

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┬──┬◡ノ(° -°ノ) Sarah
Canada
trying to post some of my art, maybe i'll help others be inspired like they have inspired me. ^_^
ANIME NERD
[x] You watch anime
[x] You read manga
[x] You buy/collect anime DVDs or manga volumes
[x] You own some other form of anime/manga merchandise
[x] You keepcall some anime characters "hot"
[x] You have cosplayed
[x] You have done so in public
[x] You have been to an anime convention
[x] You have joined a fanclub for an anime/manga character
[] You have created a funclub for an anime/manga character
[x] You have squealed when you found out somebody had the same name as an anime character you know
[x] You enjoy drawing with anime style
[x] People you know you as an 'anime' person
[x] You dislike when other countries besides Japan does cartoons with "anime" style

Anime Nerd Points: 13 =w=

VIDEO GAME NERD
[x ] you play video games
[ x] You own more than 4 different video game systems
[ x] You've had debates over which system is the greatest
[ ] You play video games every day
[ x] You have played a video game for over 10 hours
[ x] You have songs from your favorite video games on your MP3 player
[ ] You love to talk about video games
[x ] You memorize the dates for when a new game is being released
[ ] People know you as the 'gamer' person
[ ] You spend more time on video games than you do hanging out with friends
[ ] Your gaming system is in your room
[ x] You have preferences when it comes to what company your game came from
[ ] You've had debates over which company is the best
[ x] It makes you angry when somebody looks up cheat codes on the internet

Video Game Nerd Points: 8

COMPUTER NERD
[x]You use the computer every day
[x]You have an account/username on some sort of social site
[ x] You visit chatrooms
[x] You spend at least 2 hours a day on the computer
[x] You use computer faces; : D xD xP D: ^_^ >.> and etc.
[ x] It is hard to go a day without using the computer
[ x] You spend time in online forums
[ ] In the forum/chatroom you use, you are known there by everyone else
[ ] You have friends you have only met online
[ x] You have/had a girlfriend/boyfriend you have only met online
[ ] You have actually met an online friend in person
[ x] U cn ezly rd 'txttlk'
[x] You have said 'lol' or 'omg' in speech that is not online
[ derpishly, yes] You can type really, really fast.

Computer Nerd Points: 10.5 :'D

MUSICAL NERD
[ ] You play a musical instrument
[ ] You play more than one instrument
[ ] You actually really enjoy playing your instrument
[ ] You've given your instrument a name
[ ] You've participated in an extracurricular activity for your instrument
[ ] You are known by what you play
[x] You listen to classical music
[x] You are wondering whether that refers to the classical music genre or the classical music time period
[x] You have a favorite composer
[ ] All of your friends are from your band/orchestra class
[ x] You write music
[x] You've had discussions with your friends about music; your favorite composers/instruments/musical time periods/key/etc.
[ ] You have considered a professional career with your instrument
[ ] You are never nervous playing for other people

Musical Nerd Points: 5

ART NERD
[x] You like art
[x] You actually consider yourself an artist
[x] When using art supplies, the brand of them matters to you
[x] You have a favorite brand
[x] You have asked for art supplies as a Christmas/birthday gift before
[x] You give people your drawings as gifts
[x] People actually ask for your drawings
[ ] You are known as 'the art person' at your school
[x] Instead of just 'brown' or ' pink', you'd be specific; it's 'sienna brown' or 'blush pink'
[x] You have taken an art class outside of school
[x] You have considered a career as an artist
[x] Your school papers are always covered in doodles
[x] You have a favorite artist
[x] You carry a sketchbook with you everywhere you go

Art Nerd Points: 13

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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for faving Stories of feelings with no names - Revision :)
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Milk-and-Pie Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the fav on Don't Fall In Love With A Writer, I really really appreciate it!! :iconlazypoolplz:

So sorry for the late thanks :iconrazycryplz:
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thematchgirl327 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014
Ahahah, yeah, my pleasure!! ^w^  Kisses from Jongin I admire your work <3
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Milk-and-Pie Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Gosh thank you!! You're so sweet. :heart:
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thematchgirl327 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014
Hahah, we'll just end up going back and forth forever with thank you's! Artimist - wow / amazing / so cute (Emoticon)  I was wondering if you have any pointers you'd be willing to share, in regards to writing. I mean, often times I end up writing poetry in vicious spurts of emotion, or inspiration. I am not really sure how you go about your creativity process, and how you use so many lovely words, to bring the whole concept together, and convey the emotions and expressions clearly enough for readers to grasp. Ahaha, I also don't frequently post my literature on here, and the only stuff I have posted was written almost 2 years ago(i mostly submit drawn things, and then have a mass collection of fav's of others art). So, perhaps if you find the time for it, I'd really appreciate it(or if you're busy thats okay, too)!Shana Smiling Icon Thanks!
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thatone-kid Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the watch!
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thematchgirl327 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014
Gladly! >w<
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LalaLiliLalaLii Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hello ^_^ How are you?
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thematchgirl327 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
hiii, im grand. you? :3
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Bonds-webComic Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Cain and Abel : Thanks for the watch!
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